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Dreihundert
01-19-2009, 07:36 PM
One of my First Stories.

http://www.eunuch.org/Alpha/B/ea_193336ballbust.htm

Please give me constructive feedback. I write under the pen name "Ike Richardson"

misterjover
01-19-2009, 09:01 PM
Excellent story! I love the whole "popping" ordeal.

daradles
01-19-2009, 10:47 PM
What a violent start to your story writing career. Keep up the good work.

P.S. I also loved the popping!

patrick_hh
01-21-2009, 01:04 PM
Great story! Got some more of that?

sarah68
01-22-2009, 09:22 PM
very very good story

hcs
01-23-2009, 03:19 PM
One of my First Stories.

http://www.eunuch.org/Alpha/B/ea_193336ballbust.htm

Please give me constructive feedback. I write under the pen name "Ike Richardson"
Interesting story. Thanks, hcs