Excellent story, Skweezme.
You must have worked very hard to get the narrative and dialogue as good as it was. Thank you so much for all your effort.
David B.
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Excellent story, Skweezme.
You must have worked very hard to get the narrative and dialogue as good as it was. Thank you so much for all your effort.
David B.
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Thank you David! Your feedback's always positive and constructive. I'm glad you appreciate my writing. I enjoy writing these stories and seeing what She comes up with next! And yes, I'm sort of learning the craft of writing as I'm going along. Trying to let the dialogue carry a lot of the story - sometimes I'm tempted to describe what happens next, then realise a bit of dialogue will work better. Even if it's internal dialogue.
I haven't got any ideas at the moment, but look forward to the next scenario that suggests itself...:jumpsmile
Wow. Great stories. I love reading them and I'm looking forward to read next.
Yeah excellent works!
Now take a break and give that brain a rest, you deserve it! *kiss on cheek* *g*
Bet he'd rather have a *bite on the balls* :DQuote:
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Hello Skweezme,Quote:
Originally Posted by skweezme
Yes, I would say that your stories show a clear progression, this latest one being the most cinematic in scope, with the dialogue doing a lot of the work in each scene, drawing the reader into the story. My money's on the next one being extraordinary. As soon as inspiration visits you, I'll be there reading it.
David B.
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Dear David, Sylvester, BallbusingPrincesss, mark666, Ace Hardlight,
Thanks for your comments and stuff!
I'm just going for a lie down for a while...
I still appreciate your suggestions - even if I ignore them! ;)
Wow! My wife Julie has become a real ballbuster!
She’d been hinting for ages about some decorating we needed to do. I could live with it. She had plans. She thought the job would be fairly easy and was getting frustrated by my lack of enthusiasm. I knew it was going to be more difficult than she imagined. Anyway, we did it. It turned out to be challenging and time-consuming. But some aspects of it were enjoyable. Like watching Julie in her short sleeved top scraping wallpaper off. Watching the muscles in her arms as she worked at difficult bits. Imagining, as always, what she could do to my balls if she wanted to and if I could get her to.
I have to explain – Julie knows about my ballbusting desires but prefers to ignore them. She gets a bit rough with my balls in foreplay, squeezing them in her hand or riding on top of me grinding her hipbone into my genitals, But it’s always been erotic. A bit rough, but never very hard. Until now.
We’d finished the decorating, pleased with the work we’d done.
“You really didn’t want to do that, did you darling?”
“Well…you know…it needed doing, but…”
“But you were right. It was a bigger job than I’d thought it was. Sorry!”
“That’s OK. It’ll be worth it. I’m looking forward to my…reward?”
She looked me straight in the eye, smiling.
“Will that be a shag…or do you want me to tie you up and torture your balls or something?”
Even though the summer has come to an early end in London and I'm already seeing dried leaves fallen from the trees, there's still a bright spark on the horizon... Thanks for starting up a new story, Skweezme!
David B.
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She was standing there with her big hands on her hips in her decorating jeans. Almost as tall as me. Asking me if I wanted her to torture my balls. I’d been fantasizing about her doing just that over the last week while we’d been decorating. I’d been fantasizing about her doing that for a few years, to be honest.
But she actually asked me if I wanted her to hurt me. She was prepared to do it, as a reward.
“Yes. Please!”
“Yes what?” she smiled. “But how hard do you want me to hurt you, baby? I really don’t want to hurt you at all…but I will if that’s what you want. I’m just a bit worried I might get carried away or really hurt you by accident. How hard, do you think?”
“I…erm…please? Just…hurt me?”
“You just want me to hurt you, baby? I can do that! Let’s get you upstairs and tied to the bed. Then I’ll hurt you. Hurt your balls. A lot. You want me to do that to you, baby? Rather than shag me?”
There was a threat there. But I was desperate for her to hurt my balls.
So she did.
Skweezme,
Please tell us that this is really a true story. And, if it isn't, please don't say anything at all.
As David suggested, we've awaited another of your supremely erotic and aluring stories for so long.
poolman2
Really great to see you are back to write another story. Looking forward to another 'classic' from you!
very cool story so far. good drama. like the other stuff. too.
I can't heap enough praise onto you Skweez! I have thoroughly enjoyed every one of your posts. Keep up the excellent work, I await your next addition with great anticipation.
-Knave(EM)
I've just read the whole post, haven't written anything for a while. Quite pleased with some of the writing and the ideas. Very pleased with feedback and your interest! Thanks! I'm sort of in danger of repeating myself if I write much more. There's another thread here that I got a story on if you haven't read it http://www.femaledom.com/forum/showt...light=skweezme
And a happy New Year!